Draft of the Week, #9.

My first draft of November, and the month’s three-quarters gone — oy.  I’m accustomed to shoe-horning in a fair amount of me-time rather late at night, after everyone has gone to bed, but lately it’s just not happening.

But after days of a line here, a deleted stanza there, I think this morning’s work has done it.  I always struggle with tone, and a tendency to wrap things up too soon — which is only partly a result of my fractured writing schedule.  Anyway, the draft below will stay up a couple days.


4 responses to “Draft of the Week, #9.”

  1. Oh this is beautiful, Marie! So lovely….thank you for sharing it!

  2. this line is the heart of it: “Yet how easily/ they love their lives,”. that one’s a wowza!

  3. Nice work! I think this is a great “mood” piece.

  4. Thank you kindly, one & all!

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